I don't know about better articulated, it's hard to beat Saturn! But overall I see the theses as related and in a few cases I could have picked a different order with limited changes.
The thing that I found particularly potent in your piece and that made me want to write this is how this feeling of stuck time brings together a number of disparate strands. I have felt that things are stuck for a while but I saw that as a technologist: stuck progress.